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Pretty flame, pretty flame,
You shine so bright,
Pretty flame, pretty flame,
I love your light,
Pretty flame, pretty flame,
People stare at you in fright,
Pretty flame, pretty flame,
But I know it's right.

Pretty flame, pretty flame,
Don't burn out,
Pretty flame, pretty flame,
That's what it's about,
Pretty flame, pretty flame,
I don't have a doubt,
Pretty flame, pretty flame,
I'll try not to shout.

Pretty flame, pretty flame,
It burns like hell,
Pretty flame, pretty flame,
It burns my shell,
Pretty flame, pretty flame,
It takes me from my cell.

Pretty flame, pretty flame,
Don't fail me, my dear,
Pretty flame, pretty flame,
Please take me from here.
Before you say anything, I know, it sucks. But for the record I wrote this on the bus xD
Basically it`s about the time I relapsed, sadly...but it was also inspired my this picture:

Oh and for the people who are wondering about Jack Frost X Reader, I`ll be writing more tonight.
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RustyCrayons Featured By Owner May 1, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
last line of the first verse, you may want to change it to "but I know that it is right" to fit with the rhythm of the rest of the piece. same goes for the first line of the second verse, maybe something like "don't you burn out". you got the rhythm done quite nicely on the last verse though, it fits nicely.
I love the concept, and the repeated structure works well.
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